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[Celadon's Penultimate]

Okay, so I'ma try to get out another post tonight. Hopefully it'll give you some ideas about what to do next with the story. Feel free to improvise, if you think of a good plot twist. Just don't kill anybody off or drastically hurt them, or make twists and turns of plot too sharp, or we'll throw people off.

Now, again, for those who didn't see it before.

Shadowulf1 wrote

Well, some posts will have to be deleted, but for the most part, it's a pretty cohesive story.

As far as Lilith, she's got to have a new part in it. And I'm thinking a skirmish with Ella Camphrey. Paranoid as she is, Ella hears that people in Lilith's territory (Ben, Byne and Francesca) are allied with the new invaders that her henchwomen just encountered. She doesn't stay behind to figure out that the people are actually ENEMIES of Lilith Vandal-Savage, and so sends some of her best to mount a counter attack.

Who spreads the rumor of the invaders? An emissary of Samantha Trelaine, Alex the Shapeshifter, who is a double agent for the President.

And then maybe a flash of Wayne and such heading into New York, being greeted by the Overlord, Chris Parker.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Hm...I has a rather interesting idea for pulling together old and new plot parts, that have as yet not been given significance. Tomorrow I'll elaborate, but I think this will be very interesting.

Oh, and please, when I tell you, be brutally honest. I want the story to go smoothly, but also to be very interesting and exciting, so maybe you guys will wanna participate again.

[Zaleramancer]

Hmmm. You have garnered my interest.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Kay, here's one of my ideas.

Anita's thinking about how they are constantly being found by all these bad guys, and listened in on easily by the Overlords and their emissaries.

And SO, she decides that they need to have a way to get off the radar AND reconnect more easily with reinforcements. To do what she has in mind, she would normally need a space-time manipulator or the like, but, because of limited resources (being fresh out of Torres), she decides to make use of Adam's power in a new and innovative way.

Adam could draw new rooms into existing rooms, making them the equivalent of pocket dimensions. He needs only needs to draw a doorway onto the wall, and when he steps inside, he's the equivalent of a reality bender, capable of creating new rooms and adding the furniture within at will.

Using this talent, he could create new rooms, or make passageways to existing places (where he's traveled to before). And this way, we can get resources to NUMEROUS different folks at a time.

Though it'd wear him out within the span of like thirty minutes, he'd be able to maybe make an entire floor within that time.

So whaddya think? Too science-fiction-y? Too OP? Any other problems? If so, I can delete my most recent post, and think of some other stuff...

[Zaleramancer]

That is awesome.

It gives them the equivalent of a base as well as a transport- And nothing that can be easily found!

[Celadon's Penultimate]

 Good, it caught your attention.

Now that I have, I can bait you in with my OTHER idea...remember when Charisma infiltrated that government facility and freed the imprisoned supers, taking over the base?

I was thinking of linking there, and having that place start up as the ES equivalent of the Xavier Institute. Only for more than just gifted "youngsters".

They'd train to be an elite superhuman opposition to the forces of the Overlords. The X-Men-ish equivalent of Robin Hood or Zorro or something.

[Zaleramancer]

Ooooo

This gonnna be fuuuun.

I'll gladly take the part of the confused and devious villains.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

 Excelsior! I has succeeded!

Now, no rush to join in, but when you do, I'll try to make it so you have a clear idea of where the villains are and what they're up to.

Honestly, just skim over the profiles of whatever villain you want to portray, and do your best (if you want to do somebody like Lillith or Ella); and Samantha? You already should have a good idea of how she acts. No need to worry about "getting her character right" or any of that jazz.

I know 667 did a pretty good job of it, and the three of us seem to be on a similar level as far as writing talent. So happy trails. And feel free to ask questions.

[neogenetica]

I love the idea! He could have rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms! All with passageways to the different location! He could take a well hidden and actually totally innocent place(A store, etc) and then turn it into a veritable mansion to house the rebels. Mass far reaching transit and storage. Great idea Shadowulf!

[Celadon's Penultimate]

[neogenetica]

Rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms within rooms. Oh how much could be done! A labyrinth of increasing space that will ensnare any enemies who wander in and most likely remain hidden. Mwa hahaha.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

 Silly Neo.

If you participate, you'll likely be villain, I take it?

Anyhow, I have some story to write. Should be done with this new piece in a little bit.

[neogenetica]

I did make a warlord. So if I participate I shall likely control them or another Villan I create.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

...figures...

Anyways, I'm working on the latest post now. Hope you guys like it.

[neogenetica]

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Yup, two posts coming out today. First one almost done.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Aaaand...done.

Working on post two.

[neogenetica]

Nice post!

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Thank you. Now to work on post number two.

[neogenetica]

Ohhh.Yay. Renovation via artistic manipulation! You should have him make them a whole biome inside a room!