RP Comments, Cont.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Spirit. His body was entirely obliterated.

[Zaleramancer]

My sad attempt at a story has been completed.


I await your criticisms.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

 "Sad attempt"?

If my sad attempts were as good as your sad attempts, I'd have published ALL three of my Vampire Hunt stories by now!

Why does nobody here ever think their stuff is good???

Ugh...stupid pretty people always complaining about their looks...

[Zaleramancer]

Really?

It felt kind of clunky.

So, what exactly were your impressions?

[Celadon's Penultimate]

He is either a demon, or some other extradimensional entity.

Certainly not human.

Or at least he hasn't been for a LONG time.

I like the idea.

And speaking of ideas, whaddya think of the split story? Is the schism of plotlines too much? I was thinking of it being like X-men, where there's not really a general plot, but eventually it comes together to make for some plot that totally makes sense.

[Zaleramancer]

Did I convey the whole alien-ness of his view adequately?

Also, I like the split plot lines. If it starts to confuse people, we can always create separate threads for the larger plot threads.

I think I'll ponder which of the plot lines I'll pick up...

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Oh, yes, it's actually quite entertaining to think of what sort of extradimensional thing he really is...

And I was also contemplating the split-plot threads. As I said, it's kinda gonna be like the 90's X-men show. Assorted awesomeness, to come up to some final awesome conclusion (should I ever be strong enough mentally to make it to a thousand posts).

Any ideas you have, FEEL FREE! I LOVE new ideas, and plots, and plans, and schemes for subversion. Coups amuse me. So, honestly. If you get an idea, run with it, as long as impending (lethal) injury and/or death are mentioned ahead of time.

As you may have guessed, I look forward to working with you.

[Ericus Europaeus (Bug)]

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[Celadon's Penultimate]

 667 is 667. Zaleramancer is Zaleramancer. I can perceive the subtle differences in their writing styles.

[Zaleramancer]

So what does make our writing styles different?

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Well, the both of you can come off a bit poetic...and your capability for spelling and grammar is fairly similar.

But, 667 made more references to music in his imagery. His interest in it was clear. That, and he actually includes conversation in his posts.

Otherwise, though, the two of you do have rather similar (in a good way) styles.

[Zaleramancer]

I don't include conversation?

[Celadon's Penultimate]

Nope.

Though, in all honesty, I tend to have the opposite problem. Too much convo, not enough description and imagery.

[Zaleramancer]

I would do more conversation if I could get inside the heads of the characters...

[Celadon's Penultimate]

 My characters' personalities aren't apparent enough?

[Zaleramancer]

There's alot of them..

I get confuzeled.

[Celadon's Penultimate]

 Well...some of them aren't really important to know as far as personality goes. Do you at least have a grasp of their relationships with one another?

e.g. Pierce+Tessa= boyfriend+girlfriend

Ivan+Fitz= jock+nerd

Samantha+Mover= manipulator + manipulated

[Mr. Awesome]

Imma likin' this story

[Celadon's Penultimate]

 Thnx.

[Ericus Europaeus (Bug)]

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